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Post by Juppo on Oct 14, 2004 5:31:24 GMT -5
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Masamune
New Recruit
Floating Sword
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Post by Masamune on Oct 14, 2004 19:46:16 GMT -5
"I think cutting Netahlei and Anna out was for the best, even though I quite like them...this way, I think it puts more focus on the plot."
... *ducks*
Fine. The chapter is good, like it was before. However, I think Sasuke makes more sense than introducing someone odd like Netahlei. Especially since it ties in with Luc's plot. And I'm a sucker for tie-ins. Especially if they're clip-on tie-ins! *rimshot*
The rest fo the chapter was as good as when I last read it, since I could tell what was changed and what wasn't. Though it was nice to reread it mainly because I had forgot Kurtz was in it, making the last Sheena chapter make slight bit more sense.
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Post by Gremio on Oct 17, 2004 9:07:00 GMT -5
*beats Masa up for his bad joke*
I told you how I felt about your chappy, but this requires repeating:
OMG KURTZ! <3<3<3<3<3<3
Okay, I'm done. XD
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Geronimo
New Recruit
Psychic Psycho
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Post by Geronimo on Oct 18, 2004 16:52:01 GMT -5
Ah, yes, very nice, Juppo. It's great to see that you finally found the way you wanted to do this, and I have to say it came out quite well.
My thoughts on the stuff that wasn't changed remains (still love the intro).
I can't remember if the sequence with Meg was there before or not, but in any case, it was powerful.
I agree with Masa that the addition of Sasuke in favor of other characters is a good, sense-making tie-in.
Definitely leaves me wanting more. Nice!
---Gero
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Post by SamuraiMarmoset on Oct 19, 2004 21:29:05 GMT -5
Great chapiter. And people were commenting how easily I got into the head of a certain author!
Having said that, I thought Sasuke's reaction was very human, and worked well with the personality Certain Author and myself had established (though me only in that one chapiter).
I really liked Juppo's reaction to the Winger District, because he's not evil, and he is only human-Sasuke beating the tar out of him is another good indication of that.
Anyway, I look forward to seeing where this goes! Hope it works better for you now!
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