Don't squeeze the Charmin

[Masamune]

While reading this, take into consideration that parts of this chapter were written in different MONTHS. So yeah. Weird.

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And the oldbies....
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[Geronimo]

Well doooone, Masa. Another interesting, plot-moving chapter. By plot-moving, of course, I mean the Big Plot. ^^

Let's see... I already told you this, but I love Mutton's intro. Very funny. XD

Also, sneaking in through a private bathroom has to be the best way to invade Scarleticia I've ever heard of. I'm sad it's not really in Suikoden, now. XD

Some more character development, or at least reflection, I see... nice to see Sly and Dee get some Mission Action (Dee is delightfully bitchy). ^_^

My only criticisms are that I got a tad lost during the battle scene between armies, and that there were one or two slips in tense ("He marches in front of the desk, places his hands on both corners, and lowered his head"), but other than that, it was quite good.

Oh, and finally, I really liked the last scene between Kreutz and Sydonia. The dialogue was snappy and very well-done (I love the line about bad scripts). ^_^

I can't wait to see where this goes. ^_^

---Geronimo